比立斯

樓主~既故事咁好睇~一定成日黎~~:smile_40:
d文筆可以媲美d作家~

vlyc

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原帖由 forssell427 於 2007-9-26 01:51 AM 發表



我都無睇lu~~~~覺得佢係到拖時間。我睇緊

i buy onepiece, ninja & jojo
i read 死神, GANTZ, 結界師 & many others from the web

[ 本帖最後由 vlyc 於 2007-9-26 01:57 AM 編輯 ]

forssell427

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原帖由 比立斯 於 2007-9-26 01:54 AM 發表
樓主~既故事咁好睇~一定成日黎~~:smile_40:
d文筆可以媲美d作家~

太誇獎拉，我呢d文筆實在笑死人，初中生都不如。

forssell427

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原帖由 vlyc 於 2007-9-26 01:55 AM 發表

i buy onepiece, ninja & jojo
i read 死神, GANTZ, 結界師 & many others from the web

我以前都睇好多，不過家下都無咩特別漫畫我想買黎儲

權子`~!

唉..太眼訓..走先喇..記得出新post呀...

forssell427

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原帖由 權子`~! 於 2007-9-26 01:58 AM 發表
唉..太眼訓..走先喇..記得出新post呀...

最後一個post緊係無甘快架拉~~嘿嘿

vlyc

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原帖由 forssell427 於 2007-9-26 01:56 AM 發表



太誇獎拉，我呢d文筆實在笑死人，初中生都不如。

No, you wrote well

your control of pace very good
appropriate length, content each episode
and stop at a critical point
this is difficult to control
therefore there are not much daily progress long story in the newspaper nowadays

those wordings, grammer can learn
the control of pace can't

比立斯

@@"~~樓主有睇死神嫁咩~~我都有喎....................

vlyc

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原帖由 forssell427 於 2007-9-26 01:57 AM 發表



我以前都睇好多，不過家下都無咩特別漫畫我想買黎儲

ninja is also "dum" now less attractive
JOJO i still love it for the bizzare story and pictures

vlyc

no energy need sleep 886
keep writing story!